Reflecting on feedback of first draft.

From the feedback I've gotten for my first draft I've decided to add more references towards Stereotype, race and ethnicity in Disney.

Books I found on this topic
-Cinderella ate my daughter
-Diversity in Disney Films: Critical Essays on Race,Ethnicity, Gender, Sexuality and Disability
-More of the book Understanding Animation - chapter 5
-Good girls and wicked witches

Although my major problem seemed to be my style of writing. I wasn't writing academically I was writing very personal. I have a lot of (I) sentences which I needed to address first. Although in one section I was reflecting on how Disney impacted my own childhood it was still to personal. 

To focus on list:

-Disney Stereotype, race and ethnicity

-Build a better conclusion

-Get rid of I focused sentence and personal views.

-More references

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